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Offline Cyrano Johnson

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I'm moving into the latter stages of a story and I'm encountering a bit of a dilemma.

My antagonist has given his victim a degrading name that he's forcing her to call herself. And sort of gradually mind-gaming her into actually applying to herself.

I originally liked the basic (as it were) "bitch." But the further I get into the story the more corny it's starting to feel. Like, it's reminding me of Scary Terry:



... which, I don't know what that's doing to the sexytimes vibe for readers, but it's not doing much for me.

So, question. What are some other demeaning possibilities here that might feel a little less hackneyed? (I can think of plenty but the trouble is finding one that withstands repetition in a story this long.)
« Last Edit: October 18, 2017, 03:21:44 PM by Cyrano Johnson »
"Nobody brought an extra bag!"

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Maybe write out some of the repetition? for most of the story they aren't referred to by name and then at a few choice moments they are?

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@Cyrano Johnson You know this is just a clarion call for wise arses, don't you?
( I suggest you call her Bingo Tits. )
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Call her eggface pimpleberry

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That name's already taken.
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That name's already taken.


What about Scooterbutt FrumpyMuff, then? :-?

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Mouthface! :troll:

(in-joke for the movie nights crew XD )

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Sugartits.  :thumbs:
You haven't lived until you've received a teabagging from the prince of darkness. -IndieGuy
I very often rape people with my corkscrew duck penis and murder them by squishing them in an amplexus ball with all my guy friends. -Ingenue
Maybe there is a god. Maybe there are 2,000 gods. Maybe one of them has like 18 tits and five cocks. The only thing I ask is that it all just stays off my lawn. -Dark Places
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Offline Cyrano Johnson

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Mouthface! :troll:

(in-joke for the movie nights crew XD )

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I considered "Craphole." Good solid family name.
"Nobody brought an extra bag!"

The Hopewell Pop Music Academy is possibly the oddest and silliest thing I've ever written. It's part-story, part-unofficial pictures thread, and all-pervy.

The Customer is the much more substantial story I came here to write before that weird creation of mutant silliness took hold of me. Check it out. Comments welcome!

 

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